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STIGMA / MUSEHEART (Free verse) by JoyLuck Skin, on an erect penis,
burned red to black to red
as a bee flew up against
The veiny shaft.
The little bee
Brandished her sting,
Tucked in her body,
And prepared to attack.
Hesitation.
The penis trembled.
And a great gust of wind
Blew tumbled towards the insect.
Smoke enclosed her.
Blind and Confused,
Chemicals kicked in and
Her sensory nerves
Relaxed.
She settled upon the head and
Began to suck the sweet nectar.
Ambrosia? Not quite.
The penises hand reached down
Grabbed the pistil,
crushing the bee.
As the moans of the asian whore
echoed from above.
*i know stigma is the girl part of the flower but yea..*
dedicated to Margaret C. Rigsby
she has permission to use this poem too.
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Posted: June 30, 2003 2:44 PM PDT; Last modified: June 30, 2003 2:44 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.365529 Overall Rank: 3276 Comments:
Dude, I love you, you beat me to it.
Far too Spanish for my tastes
lol what do you mean by Spanish?
I am humbled by your skills. -10-
stigma an interesting word to use.
i think of stigmata which draws a link with the first verse somehow in its explicitness.
1 a archaic : a scar left by a hot iron : BRAND b : a mark of shame or discredit : STAIN c : an identifying mark or characteristic; specifically : a specific diagnostic sign of a disease
2 a stigmata plural : bodily marks or pains resembling the wounds of the crucified Christ and sometimes accompanying religious ecstasy b : PETECHIA 3 a : a small spot, scar, or opening on a plant or animal b : the usually apical part of the pistil of a flower which receives the pollen grains and on which they germinate -- see FLOWER illustration yea i can see that lalalala
i kind of meant stigmata to do with the burning red to black. The kind of violent language, the tight skin
Well, you can write. Not a bad poem at all. Except my stigma was the 'archaic' version where you are talking about the stamen, I believe.
Peace, McR
i used the archaic definiation also
when it is burned red black red same of masterbation maybe? ica n't spell someone else saw it as a stigmata
Well, in my poem depicts the stigma of mental illness, I think the word you want is stamen when the hand reaches down to grab because that would be the feminine (sucking) of the pistil. I think. :)
Here is a free tool for you: http://www.iespell.com/ Peace, Margaret
For God sake this is a terrible thing to write about a person.
Yes, and?
thanks for telling me
Ugh how childish and I cant believe they actually let you online some people are less then human. dont judge by the cover. Please reconsider revising this because it sucks.
i'm sorry. joyluck recently had his online privileges revoked...but he has sneaked back online.
btw go fuck yourself in the trough in which musefarts bathes in. 265 view(s)
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i wrote it in great haste
so there are many mistakes
but i'm not wasting time for
Margaret C.Rigsby
unless...