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Free verse № 52353

He says

Member since 2003 · Posted 10 Jun 2003 · 5 comments

He says he's 17, but he acts 10. So immature and dont know what feelings are or how to express them. He says your the only one for me. But you can tell he's lying, you can see straight threw him. He says "I didn't do it, it wasnt me". Why would some one just make that up? You know it's true. He says he'll be there for you. Yeah when he needs some loving, but where are you when hes upset? He says he loves you. Mabye he does, mabye he doesn't, who knows? mabye you. What would he says if the situation was reversed?

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5 comments

[6] systemofadown 10-Jun-03/6:07 PM Reply
sweet little peice, very clear and convinently rhymed, good job !
[5] JoyLuck 10-Jun-03/6:23 PM Reply
it sucks being used for ass
[n/a] horus8 11-Jun-03/11:46 AM Reply
I would say, "go for a long walk on a short pier".
[3] Robert K Foster › horus8 11-Jun-03/3:59 PM Reply
I agree. don't forget to soak yourself in chum.
[3] Robert K Foster 11-Jun-03/4:00 PM Reply
weak. it is screaming "teenager" and is so full of extra words and so lacking in images, freshness, or poetry.