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He says (Free verse) by Jai
He says he's 17, but he acts 10. So immature and dont know what feelings are or how to express them. He says your the only one for me. But you can tell he's lying, you can see straight threw him. He says "I didn't do it, it wasnt me". Why would some one just make that up? You know it's true. He says he'll be there for you. Yeah when he needs some loving, but where are you when hes upset? He says he loves you. Mabye he does, mabye he doesn't, who knows? mabye you. What would he says if the situation was reversed?

Up the ladder: Alone
Down the ladder: all american machine

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Arithmetic Mean: 2.8
Weighted score: 4.7377534
Overall Rank: 11725
Posted: June 10, 2003 4:50 PM PDT; Last modified: June 10, 2003 4:50 PM PDT
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Comments:
[6] systemofadown @ 80.194.115.149 | 10-Jun-03/6:07 PM | Reply
sweet little peice, very clear and convinently rhymed, good job !
[5] JoyLuck @ 68.75.22.92 | 10-Jun-03/6:23 PM | Reply
it sucks being used for ass
[n/a] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 11-Jun-03/11:46 AM | Reply
I would say, "go for a long walk on a short pier".
[3] Robert K Foster @ 66.66.214.253 > horus8 | 11-Jun-03/3:59 PM | Reply
I agree. don't forget to soak yourself in chum.
[3] Robert K Foster @ 66.66.214.253 | 11-Jun-03/4:00 PM | Reply
weak. it is screaming "teenager" and is so full of extra words and so lacking in images, freshness, or poetry.
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