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Aurora & Eclipse (Free verse) by OneFingerAnswer A glimpse of light, you came into my life
Bright, beautiful, spledid, yes but all to fleeting
I let the light shine upon me enjoying it
And yet the light reflected off me
The shine changed me, my visage
To all who could see I had changed and yet they never knew
The smile, like a trick of light that shows the hairs on a face
Never seen before, noticed but unknown
Showing up but not to stand out
And now that light is gone and yet again the face changes
Now in the dimness they still can't see why
They don't notice the fading shadow of said smile
They never knew of you,
For while I basked in your light I eclipsed the truth
I hid you as you wanted
Now you hide again
The light is gone and the shadows have come
Now I must become acustomed to the dark once again
Up the ladder:
My Children Will
Down the ladder:
The Application
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Posted: May 23, 2003 4:41 PM PDT; Last modified: May 24, 2003 12:00 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.119203 Overall Rank: 5744 Comments:
Because I was in a fucking hurry, that's why, and it would take to long, here:
A glimpse of light, you came into my life. Bright, beautiful, and splendid, but all too fleeting. I let the light shine upon me, enjoying it. Yet the light reflected off of me in ways that I know I cannot understand. The shine changed me, my visage. To all who could see, I had changed, and yet they never knew the me of before. The smile, a trick of light that shows the hairs on one's face. A young man becoming. Noticed, but still unknown. Showing up, but not to stand out. Now that the light is gone, yet again the faces change. Now in the dimness they still won't see why. They will not notice the fading shadow of said smile. They never knew you. For a while, I basked in your light. I eclipsed the truth I hid you as you requested. Now you retreat again. The light is gone, and the shadows have come back. Now I must become acustomed to the dark.
Line and stanza breaks are up to the writer. Just because I didn't do it the same way you did doesn't mean it's an error.
As for most of your other changes, I don't think so. SOme of them are nice but not what I intended.
Did I say that it was Ryan? I merely took the time to show you that I do. My changes were not intended to do anything other then reflect the piece off of my form the way that It affected me. Would you rather I just ignored your work, or said nice poem? Because that can be arranged.
No I wouldn't rather you ignored it. I'm sorry I came off that way but I just got dumped yesterday (hence the poem). I'm still a little pissed at being told that I am now single through an e-mail. I appriciate help with my poems but it just seemed a little harsh.... Thanks for trying.
I see, well, I'm sure it's not the first or the last time. Hang in there. I would wager my soul that this will turn out to be a blessing in disguise. These calamities have a way of changing one for the better and attracting people to you that are more worthy and accepting of your gifts and love. I have a feeling something wonderful is right around the corner waiting to take you to the next level. One must molt to reveal their true beauty, so molt. I'll be waiting to hear the good news, because trust me, it's on its way. For now just know that I'm right, and you'll be fine. farewell for now.
With all my hope and strength. Your friend. Jeremi (horus8).
i like... it takes me to a place that's dark...
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And again I ask you: Why not be helpful and point them out? Why instead simply tell of their existence?