poemranker ::Gut Feeling, A Burst of by liquidlama

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Free verse № 5003

Gut Feeling, A Burst of

Member since 2002 · Posted 16 Jul 2002 · 6 comments

It seems sometimes we have nothing to talk about, but talk, I'll fall in step. I feel you're a woman I could love its new to me. Is it hard to do? no Can I do it with you? Can we fit together like ying and yang? I wanna yang like you show you my energy its like, blam! You can't flip my switch, show and share add me to the scene I see my place in that pool, that reflection is me. A me i'm tired of seeing. My mind saying you don't have to bang your chest, but get rid of that public fool act straighten your back straighten you face what's wrong with you? scared? nervous? not at all Major pleebians slingin' sacs, layin' down their mass-produced macs...wearing the sameness brand names like elevators to the top of the heap. Think they got it all cuz the all mighty men lead them nearly completely. But not you, not like that; for different, higher reasons. I see you feeding me. i'm feeding you, not all the things you want, hell we could both eat. Taking bites out of all the facets of life I know a little how but open my mouth wider, will you ?

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6 comments

[9] ashtar 17-Jul-02/12:12 AM Reply
Join the beatnik revolution.
[8] horus8 17-Jul-02/12:29 AM Reply
Ashte,r can be burroughs. I'll be Jack, and you can be Ginsberg, We'll make Dark Angel that little rat fucker that hungout, but no one can remember his name. Cuz baby, we're on the roadd
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 17-Jul-02/1:08 AM Reply
Oh... oh I see... I'M the rat fucker. Well at least I'm a gentleman. While you, Sir, are that most vile of creations: a letch. Don't give me 'rat fucker', man. I've been in this game since you were in diapers! I get results! You get off my damn case or I'm gettin' the DA in here! Comprendez?
[8] horus8 17-Jul-02/1:43 AM Reply
Just cuz i can't recall his name(Hokne?') does not mean he wasn't good (i mean great like you, oh mighty shadow stretcher
Besides I thought you were snoozing. Don't you work? for christs saket
[8] <{Baba^Yaga}> 18-Aug-02/5:37 AM Reply
Full of wit and slit. This poem is saucy to say the least. Beautiful style and story.T
[7] Jeremi B. Handrinos 9-Nov-03/6:00 AM Reply
You must be a liquid lama?