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Member since 2002 · Posted 10 May 2003 · Edited 23 May 2003 · 5 comments

a long finger rests on the south side the pendulum signifying a passing between the deeds undone and the tasks left at hand neither the less essential both vital in presence for corruption befalls all equally in mortal passing the accuracy of each new step is subject to a missed beat where all must be in tune for destiny to shine through and fate to plot its course the daily winding of the parts only works to stall tomorrow perhaps even beyond that but never can it be counted on to stay on track. note all epochs because they never occur without a witness to prove that your mind hasn't wondered a bit into the delusion of the fantasy ascending and overcoming reason.

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[8] horus8 10-May-03/2:57 PM Reply

Well, it's different. That's for sure. I enjoyed it.

[n/a] Bill Z Bub 23-May-03/12:57 AM Reply

Very cerebral. But also vague and unclear to me.
For example:
"a passing
between the deeds undone
and the tasks left at hand"

Aren't the deeds undone also the deeds left to do, or in other words the tasks left at hand? They seem to be the exact same thing.

[n/a] brazen › Bill Z Bub 23-May-03/1:10 AM Reply

hmm...seems you are quite right in that fact. the point i was aiming for was for "deeds undone" to reflect the past and "tasks left at hand" to reflect the future, but it is a bit to vague. i'm still working on it, so i'll try and tighten that confusion up next.

[8] horus8 23-May-03/1:53 AM Reply

The Gregorian calendar only succeeded in killing is quicker, that's for sure.

[n/a] brazen › horus8 23-May-03/1:58 AM Reply

but it is a step above polish glow-in-the-dark sundials