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time weights (Free verse) by brazen

a long finger rests on the south side the pendulum signifying a passing between the deeds undone and the tasks left at hand neither the less essential both vital in presence for corruption befalls all equally in mortal passing the accuracy of each new step is subject to a missed beat where all must be in tune for destiny to shine through and fate to plot its course the daily winding of the parts only works to stall tomorrow perhaps even beyond that but never can it be counted on to stay on track. note all epochs because they never occur without a witness to prove that your mind hasn't wondered a bit into the delusion of the fantasy ascending and overcoming reason.

Bill Z Bub 23-May-03/12:57 AM
Very cerebral. But also vague and unclear to me.
For example:
"a passing
between the deeds undone
and the tasks left at hand"

Aren't the deeds undone also the deeds left to do, or in other words the tasks left at hand? They seem to be the exact same thing.




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