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Sunday night movies after bible study (Other) by Bachus
Goosebumps are afraid of me now. Since I started drinking shoe polish again. Looks like a painting of my mouth black & puckered- -and I dragged that loose bitch straight down the hall. Carving cold soap, squeezing limestone, gathering up what was left of Godzilla's lunch as reminders. When you said "you cared a lot"? I started crying- -for no good reason, no goodyear, no good bar, no good God. Then Fellini came back on. It was eight and a half. I went to salt up the blown corn but instead it went everywhere, but where I'd aimed for.

Down the ladder: Transfer

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Weighted score: 6.9193907
Overall Rank: 201
Posted: April 29, 2003 12:54 AM PDT; Last modified: April 29, 2003 12:54 AM PDT
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[10] god'swife @ 209.178.176.97 | 29-Apr-03/1:53 AM | Reply
Fuck the ps, it's all about the corn. Gruesome and human. 3rd couplet, and of course the All-Powerful 1st line. Amen, brother.
[10] god'swife @ 209.178.176.97 | 29-Apr-03/1:58 AM | Reply
The last stanza, you know, I mean, I'm totally serious about the corn, it's like, you know, 8 1/2 and those women at the end living in the house of his imagination, and she doesn't ant to leave eventhough she's old, and they all rise up with their brooms and laundry, it's like the corn, out of control and all over the linoleum floor.

Fucking brilliant, something so precise.
[6] Garrett S Sexton @ 213.122.40.79 | 30-Apr-03/2:18 PM | Reply
fuckin funny HA HA HA HA HA....6
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