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two flies (Limerick) by suckmychucks two flies fucking on the wall-
one is a horse fly,
one's kind of small.
it's nothing to think of
just something to see.
darling, i'm busy
come inconvenience me.
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Posted: April 9, 2003 12:01 PM PDT; Last modified: April 9, 2003 12:01 PM PDTWeighted score: 3.8906167 Overall Rank: 13437 Comments:
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razorgrin @ 192.197.143.141
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10-Apr-03/11:11 AM
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The last line doen't scan. Instead, it irritates like the whiny voice of a zitty teenager. Which, if you think about it, makes sense.
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suckmychucks @ 64.41.22.175
> razorgrin
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10-Apr-03/11:38 AM
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fuck you pus licker.
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razorgrin @ 192.197.142.54
> suckmychucks
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11-Apr-03/3:21 PM
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I doubt you could. too small and covered in small pimples. Cornhusker.
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suckmychucks @ 64.41.24.245
> razorgrin
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11-Apr-03/8:14 PM
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suck my pimpled cornhusk, you fuckin pseudo-masochist.
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razorgrin @ 192.197.142.136
> suckmychucks
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15-Apr-03/11:28 AM
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Again, no. Too small.On that topic you know, you can order products off the internet to fix that problem. Where do you get the 'masochist', anyway? As has been shown many a time, I enjoy causing the pain. Now if you refuse to clean my boots, you're going back in your fucking cage. Whiny little bitch.
Not Very Witty
Not Clever Enough to Be Gay A horrible piece I'm forced to say I wasn't amused in the least little bit Whining worse than even me Which is hard I'll admit A zero I'm afraid it has to be Thats all you get
It's good but i dont think its classified as a limerick (a-a-b-b-a)
That is NOT a limerick.
Limerick is supposed to be of 5 lines and follow therhyme scheme of aabba 289 view(s)
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