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Say Hello (Haiku) by Sawa
The sun, she rises -- Pinholed in cellophane clouds, Counting down the days

Up the ladder: Seattle Seasons
Down the ladder: Jenny Jones, Jenny Jones

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.6666665
Weighted score: 4.9103527
Overall Rank: 9655
Posted: April 4, 2003 12:14 AM PST; Last modified: April 4, 2003 12:14 AM PST
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[6] Jeremi B. Handrinos @ 24.126.113.154 | 4-Apr-03/12:41 PM | Reply
The sun is a masculine entity. The moon feminine.
Ruby's masculine. Emeralds feminine. To call the sun a she is practically counter effective. Like calling your mother 'dad' after shaving off her pubic hair and gluing it to her face.
[n/a] Sawa @ 12.229.220.155 > Jeremi B. Handrinos | 6-Apr-03/5:42 PM | Reply
Says you.
[n/a] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 > Sawa | 6-Apr-03/7:01 PM | Reply
Me, and every advanced culture that's ever existed on this planet for the last 20,000 years. Even the Amazon's viewed the sun as a masculine star, and they were as dikey and stupid as it gets, but then I read this. I never knew Ra was short for Ramona. Now I do. Next you're going to tell me that Jesus was a female alien impersonating the son of god right? Please don't abuse the son because you have know understanding or control over the men in your life. It shows a closemindedness that you were really going after when you wrote this. I would believe that God was a woman before the sun, and that says a lot. In your gut, so do you, and 99.9% of the planet for 99.9% of our current history, oral and written.
[n/a] Sawa @ 12.229.220.155 > horus8 | 7-Apr-03/12:07 AM | Reply
What I did isn't closeminded at all; there's nothing to close my mind off to. Just because a substantial amount of people associate the sun with all things masculine doesn't mean everyone has to abide by it as if it were an unspoken rule, something I see happening a lot on Poem Ranker. Heaven forbid I call the sun by 'she', something that doesn't have sex organs to identify it as neither male nor female in the first place. I don't think anyone is looking to mimic and copycat anything in their haiku; I certainly am not. If haiku, all of poetry and the rest of the world was static and stagnant, nothing would ever evolve and grow. What kind of a world would that be to live in?
[n/a] Garrett S Sexton @ 213.122.134.141 | 5-Apr-03/12:24 AM | Reply
HELLO
[6] Robert K Foster @ 209.68.70.106 | 11-Jun-03/6:41 AM | Reply
I don't get the title.
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