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So Happy (Free verse) by openwounds
Do you ever feel abandoned? So lost and lonely . You want to pass away . You want to hide away . Disregard all the problems that worry you Can you do that ; Can you take a gun and shoot yourself? Can you take a knife and cut yourself? Will you whimper and beg for release ? Liberate yourself from all the Tender wounds that are Opened everyday. New lesions on my heart. Scars that will never go away.

Up the ladder: Tearing Me Apart (again)
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Arithmetic Mean: 3.75
Weighted score: 4.8509965
Overall Rank: 10519
Posted: March 24, 2003 1:11 PM PST; Last modified: March 24, 2003 1:11 PM PST
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[7] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 24.209.19.37 | 24-Mar-03/2:41 PM | Reply
Yes. Yes. No (bullets may be fast but knowing my luck I'd miss or something). Been there done that Think I still have a few scars from that, no wait those are the cigarette burns. Maybe It all depends on how good it feels. Nah! They give me my identity.

Now being serious I noticed 'new lesions'. Other than that I it doesn't look like you have any typos that I can see. This lacks you usual hint of detail that makes things what you write have some sense of depth, But I love how you pulled off the 'will you whimper and beg for release' line. -7-
[5] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 24-Mar-03/5:36 PM | Reply
Thank god CNN will at least put an end to reality tv... And you too, we can only hope. (what's that now like seven poems i've ranked, and still i'm fucking in a state of permenant yawn here? Excuse me). This is shit, pure, stinky, three day old and rained on (several times) shit, sorry about your luck.
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