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So Happy (Free verse) by openwounds

Do you ever feel abandoned? So lost and lonely . You want to pass away . You want to hide away . Disregard all the problems that worry you Can you do that ; Can you take a gun and shoot yourself? Can you take a knife and cut yourself? Will you whimper and beg for release ? Liberate yourself from all the Tender wounds that are Opened everyday. New lesions on my heart. Scars that will never go away.

thepinkbunnyofdoom 24-Mar-03/2:41 PM
Yes. Yes. No (bullets may be fast but knowing my luck I'd miss or something). Been there done that Think I still have a few scars from that, no wait those are the cigarette burns. Maybe It all depends on how good it feels. Nah! They give me my identity.

Now being serious I noticed 'new lesions'. Other than that I it doesn't look like you have any typos that I can see. This lacks you usual hint of detail that makes things what you write have some sense of depth, But I love how you pulled off the 'will you whimper and beg for release' line. -7-




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