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sexy (Free verse) by elizabethann he told me to dye my hair blonde
and dress really sexy
maybe i'll just
shave my head
and wear men's clothing
sexy isn't my thing
but i am beautiful
with my scarred arms and
not-so-perfect breasts
and when i look in
the mirror i can
smile
with my chubby cheeks and
thick thighs.
sexy just isn't my thing.
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Posted: March 12, 2003 9:16 PM PST; Last modified: March 12, 2003 9:16 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.4545455 Overall Rank: 2900 Comments:
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13-Mar-03/7:55 AM
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iron out the telling spots. this can fly.
Im not sure 'sexy' isn't your thing. I mean a bald beautiful girl in mens clothing can be pretty down-right sexy. Think about this some more, actually don't think...feel.
THINK. FEEL... EXPLORE.
I like your use of the words "really sexy" to make the poeme seem really sexy. Also, great job throwing "scarred arms" in there. Poetry is always so much more profound when scars are involved. It's just that they're so deep, and so beautiful. Yes. You heard me. I said "beautiful". Because my scars ARE beautiful. They say more about me than Eminem ever could.
tonight, dark angel's cleaning out his closet.
snap back to reality, dark angel. Get back to your old rhapsody. (yo, just kidding, I never meant to hurt yo-ouo-ouou)
pheh. Scars=drama-queen cries for attention. I have legs the same measurements as Bettie Page's and an ass that could have its own religion. Can't sympathize, sorry. Maybe massive plastic sugery will alleviate your pain?
i don't think you're really understanding it. i don't feel bad about myself because i'm not his definition of sexy. i don't want to change a damn thing about me. this poem is about me being happy who i am and accepting the fact that i'm not nessecarily "sexy".
I don't think you got my comment, ugmo. The fact that you bother writing this sad attempt at self-loving suggests that you still have issues about your body. You know, "methinks the lady doth protest too much". The poeme's got all the depth of a gap ad and seems just a cheesy rip-off of that awful "unpretty" song.
lol. ok. well i wasn't aware that it was an attempt at self-loving, but ok. oh and i do have issues about my body. but then again, i've never met anyone who doesn't. and the unpretty song is good - in my opinion. maybe that explains it, right?
I know how you feel, elizabethann. I used to have serious issues with my body, but now I'm beginning to accept myself for who I am. In case you didn't know, I'm disabled. It can be a problem at times, but there are very few bodily maneuvers that cannot be achieved with some sort of harness, a small tub of vaseline, a pair of binoculars and a basketful of self-esteem. And another basket. And a goat.
Unfortunately, such maneuvers include the sequence of hideous contortions required to operate a sander using only my groin. I tried this once and was very seriously injured.
Holy shit, I remember reading about that in the paper!!!! That was YOU?!?
What happened to the girl? did she end up dropping the charges? There was a rumor going around that you worked out some sort of deal with her where she dropped the charges and you let her keep the goat.
you mean...she...got his goat?
<ugh>
WELL LOOK AT MISS HIGH CLASS OVER HERE
LISTEN TOOTS IF IT WASN'T FOR ME YOU'D STILL BE FLUFFING THE CAST OF 'ROSEANNE' FOR $2/HR
who says i'm not? a girl needs a hobby, luv.
I can understand that. something like the way a boy needs toys to play with.
zacklee
I thought it DID have its own religion, dear.
sorry, must limerick:
Elizabethan elizabethann was recently told by her man to doll herself up (christ, what a schmuck) But she's not really sure that she can.
hmm...ok, but could use more feeling
CHUBBY BUM CHEEKS ARE REAL SEXY
i really like this one. solid topic and powerful portrayal of your feelings. once again, powerful structure to set the rhythm and speed of the poem...keep it up...peace
mike 261 view(s)
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