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Trust? (Free verse) by daehtop As the earth slows,
Promises of love are vanquished in the sky.
Put yourself in my shoes.
As darkness closes in around you,
And lies drip from your lips,
I die a little more each time...forever.
Up the ladder:
if really its me
Down the ladder:
Winter Nothings
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Posted: July 12, 2002 3:19 PM PDT; Last modified: July 13, 2002 5:22 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.9103527 Overall Rank: 9631 Comments:
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sapphire_rain7 @ 216.170.166.36
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12-Jul-02/9:45 PM
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i like how you put so much into one short poem. some people can write epic long poems, and still not really say anything.
Everything fits so well together - the title, the words, the emotions ... I feel like I can put myself in your shoes - very well done!
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