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Ment to be confusing (Free verse) by thepinkbunnyofdoom
Reality is a frame of mind Hanging on the wall What about the picture? Lying here in my bed Wake Up in dread Take my heart off the shelf Strap on my head and start walking Thinking things that I've thought before Smoke my cigarette and try to forget Today is a new day Walk thru the door past my memories, toward tomorrow Sit back and stare at the scene that is my life Say my lines then lie back Into space time Spiral back into gravity What the Fuck is wrong with me? Shifing in and out of my skin Can't escape from within Reality clings to me Won't let me into the frame of fanstasy I'm painted in broken dreams, Endlessly silent with lost hope Trapped in the canvas of reality Stuck in this dumb self portrait Dark colors to outline my anger and hate Sharp edges to punctuate my despair Harsh strokes gives me that look in my eyes Are they brown? Are they green? They're so Angry, Dirty, and Unclean The frames so bent, twisted, and spent Holding me so tight I was forced to give up the fight You can see it in the right light I look so strong but unfortunatly I'm still too weak I carry on but for seconds I'm gone Sick daydreams on my tounge I fly away, doesn't really matter where just away

Down the ladder: Losing you

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.96
Weighted score: 6.9468822
Overall Rank: 169
Posted: February 21, 2003 2:18 PM PST; Last modified: March 22, 2003 12:18 AM PST
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[9] Jeremi B. Handrinos @ 24.126.113.154 | 22-Feb-03/1:52 AM | Reply
my compliments. here. 9.
[n/a] lunar @ 195.92.67.76 | 23-Mar-03/3:37 AM | Reply
Also good - i think your work is very interesting, parts are brilliant, parts shite but definatly lots of potential, makes me feel sad to read them so god knows how u feel
[7] maffy @ 195.92.194.13 | 23-Mar-03/11:44 AM | Reply
indeed true
[n/a] Jeremi @ 68.14.26.239 | 24-Mar-03/11:25 AM | Reply
You insinuate that I am Maffy and you have also insinuated that Mr Pig is me on both counts that is childish and wrong. Who the hell are you to say who I am? As for that laughable remark regarding the so called fact that you voted me in to the top 15 that is total and utter bullshit and you know it. I challenge you to find one just one positive comment on any of my poems, you will not because you havent. Also if you doid vote me in to the top 15 why not actually say something nice, how can I know you have left a good vote if you refrain from following it up with a comment, WHY ? I know why because you don?t want to say anything nice, for whatever reason, maybe the reason is you are incapable of being sincere, you are a hypocrite by saying I am a vote obsessive when YOU went on to the comments section of poemranker whining like a puppy about how pissed off you get at all the anonymous blue votes? As I say you are conceited, hypocritical prat who is so far up his own ass you can see last nights dinner up there. As for bringing ranger into this how would you like it ? this is my beef with you, ranger has asked you many times to follow your critique on his work with your help because he respects your work. And finally I couldn?t give a fuck about votes, so vote your little finger stained blue as many zeros as you like, I understand it?s a form of egotistical masturbation for you so send me your sddress and I?ll even throw in some vaseline to help you on your way. If you are a better poet than me yeah that?s your opinion, I accept criticism but when dozens of other distinguished poets commend my work, you always berate it every single time and I believe you to be highly overrated and tedious. YOU HAVE THE LOWEST AVERAGE VOTE ON POEMRANKER ITS 1.87 THAT PROOVES YOU VOTE EVERYTHING YOU READ AS SHIT, EVEN THE WORST POEM ON POEMRANKER HAS A HIGHER MARK. I feel sorry for you, you really need to get out more. By the way the only thing swooning over you is that enormous dick thats on your head.You insinuate that I am Maffy and you have also insinuated that Mr Pig is me on both counts that is childish and wrong. Who the hell are you to say who I am? As for that laughable remark regarding the so called fact that you voted me in to the top 15 that is total and utter bullshit and you know it. I challenge you to find one just one positive comment on any of my poems, you will not because you havent. Also if you doid vote me in to the top 15 why not actually say something nice, how can I know you have left a good vote if you refrain from following it up with a comment, WHY ? I know why because you don?t want to say anything nice, for whatever reason, maybe the reason is you are incapable of being sincere, you are a hypocrite by saying I am a vote obsessive when YOU went on to the comments section of poemranker whining like a puppy about how pissed off you get at all the anonymous blue votes? As I say you are conceited, hypocritical prat who is so far up his own ass you can see last nights dinner up there. As for bringing ranger into this how would you like it ? this is my beef with you, ranger has asked you many times to follow your critique on his work with your help because he respects your work. And finally I couldn?t give a fuck about votes, so vote your little finger stained blue as many zeros as you like, I understand it?s a form of egotistical masturbation for you so send me your sddress and I?ll even throw in some vaseline to help you on your way. If you are a better poet than me yeah that?s your opinion, I accept criticism but when dozens of other distinguished poets commend my work, you always berate it every single time and I believe you to be highly overrated and tedious. YOU HAVE THE LOWEST AVERAGE VOTE ON POEMRANKER ITS 1.87 THAT PROOVES YOU VOTE EVERYTHING YOU READ AS SHIT, EVEN THE WORST POEM ON POEMRANKER HAS A HIGHER MARK. I feel sorry for you, you really need to get out more. By the way the only thing swooning over you is that enormous dick thats on your head.
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 24.209.19.37 > Jeremi | 24-Mar-03/2:17 PM | Reply
Huh??
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 24.209.21.223 > thepinkbunnyofdoom | 28-Jun-03/9:32 PM | Reply
Weird place, weird time. I can't even begin to phathom more than a guess at what I was saying. Its another poem on escaping reality.
[8] Caducus @ 62.105.88.10 | 25-Mar-03/4:30 AM | Reply
Pinkbunny, I dont know why Jeremi pasted my comment left on the recent 'Oxywarmonger' by poetandknowit, it has nothing to do with me but sorry its found its way on to here, thats unfortunate.

I have read this poem and think its a good surreal poem, 8. I was surprised to see this plagiarixzed comment, once again apologies, speak to jeremi who pasted it.
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