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WorkingDream (Free verse) by harrytuttle Miscellaneous pieces of metal, and numbers,
Chase me around the room.
I try to escape
Jump up on the dresser
Roll under the bed
Crawl toward the door
But it is useless, they will prevail, I will be engulfed.
But then I wake up
Up the ladder:
Tanka
Down the ladder:
Your Smile
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Posted: July 11, 2002 11:48 AM PDT; Last modified: July 11, 2002 11:48 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.55 Overall Rank: 12699 Comments:
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Red_is_life @ 212.219.59.126
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12-Jul-02/7:24 AM
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Good but i dont like the end
This would be a good poem. Unfortunatley, it just seems that you are describing a dream other than expressing it in poetry.
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