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Your Smile (Free verse) by ARTIE
Comes the night, gloom of darkness, with its ethereal subdue, T'is you I feel, in my dreams, so warm and close - it's true. Sense my hands, explore the curves, your form of endless beauty, For in my mind, my touch for you - t'is only earthly duty. With my lips I'd touch, so soft and warm, this sweetness I do miss, Are my desires to share, not but one with you - this thing we call a kiss. And o'er your legs I'd stroke, and else for you, that happy climactic place, For t'is not just mine, soft smile I see......but that upon your face.

Up the ladder: WorkingDream
Down the ladder: grope

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.1
Weighted score: 4.55
Overall Rank: 12694
Posted: July 15, 2002 12:00 PM PDT; Last modified: July 15, 2002 12:00 PM PDT
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Comments:
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 62.190.174.80 | 15-Jul-02/12:56 PM | Reply
At first I thought this poem was rubbish because it was difficult to read. But once I understood what you were saying, I realised it was complete crap.
[n/a] ARTIE @ | 15-Jul-02/1:40 PM | Reply
Hey Dark Angel, answer me this: Do you see a glass as half empty or half full?
I'm curious.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 62.190.174.80 | 15-Jul-02/1:47 PM | Reply
Oh, ARTIE. It matters not how full the glass is, but whether it contains the Holy Lifeblood of Christ. For only by partaking of Jesu's blood may we hope to conceal our sinful, everlasting nudity.
[n/a] razorgrin @ 142.166.109.12 | 15-Jul-02/1:54 PM | Reply
But I like my everlasting nudity, especially with a pair of knee high boots and a black fedora.
[n/a] ARTIE @ | 15-Jul-02/2:10 PM | Reply
Sorry, but the real answer is: You, need a smaller glass!
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 62.190.174.80 | 15-Jul-02/3:51 PM | Reply
I, wish I knew what you were talking about!
[1] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 15-Jul-02/3:58 PM | Reply
"God damnit" I had such a good comment at the tip of my finger for this Art, but then I read Dark Angel's and was doubled over, so i'm just gonna settle on a Zanex and smile.u
[n/a] ARTIE @ | 15-Jul-02/4:23 PM | Reply
Oh, Dark Angel, what have you done?
You couldn't see the need for a smaller glass? You can dish it, but you cannot take it. In my irreverant dyslexia, "Oh my Dog! What have I done?" Ask horus8 for a Zanex, it'll all be well.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 62.190.174.80 | 15-Jul-02/4:39 PM | Reply
I giveth but I taketh not? And who does that remind you of, my child? That's right: a vending machine. It's true that a vending machine taketh your money. But in return it giveth you delights far beyond your imagination! And is that not what I have done for you?
[9] Lenore @ 64.252.107.114 | 15-Jul-02/8:03 PM | Reply
Slightly naughty with sweet undertones. I like it.
[7] deleted user @ 64.123.118.21 | 22-Jul-02/11:02 PM | Reply
If I were in my " all-is-well-with the-world-rose-colored-glasses" mood I would say this is a beautiful poem well deserving a ten. Unfortunetly I am quite vexed so you get a 7 for useing good vocabulary
[3] Shardik @ 24.126.113.154 | 10-Oct-03/5:37 PM | Reply
Like a bent uncut penis doing it's dirty work in my colon.
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