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ocean mistake (Free verse) by Gordiansknot i die symbollically, figurativlly, and literally
the blue glass shattered against the wall
into the cracks with the peace that i need so despretly in me
fingers grinding, so bloody in the wall,
the darkness of the never ending fight
its gaining, im loosing; this never ending scream
it only hits my ears. be happy. but i like
this never ending tragic night.
Up the ladder:
Retreived
Down the ladder:
My task
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Posted: January 19, 2003 6:02 PM PST; Last modified: January 19, 2003 6:02 PM PSTWeighted score: 4.5517645 Overall Rank: 12683 Comments:
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Des, in all honesty, you're much better at spending money then writing poetry, but i'm sure you knew that, and it's no water of your back.
Even Muti's poetry is scorching better than this husk exoskeletoned denial.
I could edit it for you.
that is if you'd like.