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Retreived (Lyric) by T'ien
Redemption's flowing cry calls me by and by fond memory hidden timless from every eyes caress stolen minds of pleasures fool i give myself and become your tool I forget why i lost you until i find you your followed sheep am I forever watching always knowing of your bitter sweet hidden virtue

Up the ladder: A lighthouse
Down the ladder: ocean mistake

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.3333333
Weighted score: 4.5517645
Overall Rank: 12687
Posted: January 13, 2003 2:32 PM PST; Last modified: January 13, 2003 2:32 PM PST
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[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 | 13-Jan-03/3:15 PM | Reply
jesus. "timless"? no. listless.limp.vague.weak.shit.shit.shit. here a 10. you obviously need a hug and more sugar on your raisen bran. fuck. i'm going to the random area. where the real poets once dwelt.
[n/a] poemwanker @ 212.219.142.161 > <{Baba^Yaga}> | 14-Jan-03/6:42 AM | Reply
Oh you are funny babayaga aren't you? This is better than a lot of songs that get popular and make loads of money-obviously you missed the 'lyric' bit at the start, you observant person, you.
T'ien this is good, I liked it v. much well done.
However, I don't get the second to last line-'Your followed sheep'-is it a typo? Please explain.
[n/a] T'ien @ 81.134.113.221 > poemwanker | 19-Mar-03/2:14 PM | Reply
i wrote this so long ago and havent been on poemranker in ages either so i forget what i was thinking when i wrote this thanks for sticking up for me i havn't been on here in ages precisely because of imasculated morons like those guys
[3] <~> @ 67.84.171.238 | 13-Jan-03/3:31 PM | Reply
i never lost a tim, but i lost a dave and an art and a charles, one time. i think. but i don't really remember. they were all tools anyway. they followed their sheep around, just like in your poem!!!
[2] nentwined @ 68.232.253.122 | 4-Oct-06/5:51 PM | Reply
death to love!
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