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A Sonnet for Barbara (Other) by PatColvin While I was wondering just what it meant
To find my love, to give someone my heart,
I nearly gave up hope that God had sent
Someone into this world who'd fit the part.
A Girl who'd love me for the guy I am,
A Woman worthy of my deepest love,
A Beauty who would cling to me, her man,
A Princess faithful to my Lord above.
But now my doubts are gone. I've found in you
Each one of these and ever so much more.
And I'm convinced I've found the woman who
I want to be my wife forevermore.
So take this ring, my Barbara -- share my life!
And be my Love, my Lady and my Wife.
(Copyright Patrick A. Colvin, 2002)
Up the ladder:
Insight
Down the ladder:
Craving
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 3.8
Posted: July 9, 2002 7:15 PM PDT; Last modified: July 9, 2002 7:15 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.4 Overall Rank: 12987 Comments:
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OneFingerAnswer @ 216.138.11.3
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9-Jul-02/7:28 PM
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I like it. Good job and I hope you two are happy.
a nice sentiment, but I couldn't get into the cadence of the poem and didn't really find anything to take out of it/remember from it.
Hey, Colvin, I doubt you're reading this, but I just thought you'd like to know I fucking hated this poeme. You must be so empty of personality that the only way you can continue to exist is to tell yourself that God loves you and Barbara loves you and christ you're pathetic can't you find some pleasure in existence without forcing other people to be your source of joy?
And then take off those shoes and get in that kitchen and make me some supper!! Although the sentiment may be sincere, the poem is filled with over the top mush.
it is nice as a poem for your wife, but noone else, its rhymes are unimaginative and weak, and it doesnt have a lot of appeal -- sonnets are ahrd though so ill give you a 5 for effort -
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