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profile of an abuser (Free verse) by inka Tell me how you feel today
I'm here, I care
f------ stop staring
you know i hate that
you b----
come here i'm sorry
i didn't mean it
did i hurt you?
here i'll kiss it
heres some flowers
whatever you want
just don't leave
you f------ whore
what the hell
f------ listen b----
i'll push you to the floor
i'm sorry dear
don't leave me
i'll do anything
Up the ladder:
Wanking
Down the ladder:
Women Fight Dirty
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Posted: January 10, 2003 12:31 AM PST; Last modified: January 10, 2003 12:31 AM PSTWeighted score: 4.9551764 Overall Rank: 8702 Comments:
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Ranger @ 212.219.142.161
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10-Jan-03/12:59 AM
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You will indeedy
I like the twee self censorship of blocking out your own swearwords. My, how Derrida would laugh!
a drastic improvement. what part of michigan are you from..Troy. Southfield.Birmingkam, perhaps Saginaw? you're fired. have an 8
It would be a better poem if you took out all the self-censorship and put in the real swear words you were using. It would hit harder. Never self-censor. It cuts the oomph out of your poetry.
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