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profile of an abuser (Free verse) by inka

Tell me how you feel today I'm here, I care f------ stop staring you know i hate that you b---- come here i'm sorry i didn't mean it did i hurt you? here i'll kiss it heres some flowers whatever you want just don't leave you f------ whore what the hell f------ listen b---- i'll push you to the floor i'm sorry dear don't leave me i'll do anything

Cha no Onna 10-Jan-03/8:35 PM
It would be a better poem if you took out all the self-censorship and put in the real swear words you were using. It would hit harder. Never self-censor. It cuts the oomph out of your poetry.




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