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Free verse № 34998

crack of light

by inka

Member since 2003 · Posted 10 Jan 2003 · 3 comments

Darkness fills the room powdered clouds float about can't see you so clearly as you start to fade walk away make the distance between us look back at me walk away with hesitance the powdered clounds are falling as i look up at you ice blue eyes gazing at the white of the crack in the door flourescent yellow tears fall roses wither in my hands the stems become darker as the light becomes brighter distance longer as you walk away the hesitance stronger in the doorway you stand alone

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[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> 10-Jan-03/6:51 PM Reply
the title alone..gets a ten. lol.
[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> 10-Jan-03/6:53 PM Reply
"the powdered clounds are falling" i'm sorry, but you are smoking hard core crack, put the pipe down..take a minute before the powdery clounds come and carry you away.
[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> 10-Jan-03/6:54 PM Reply
yes. it sucks. i'm blind now, and mortally wounded. (i tried to complain, but it wouldn't let me, so here's my complaint)