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the play (Free verse) by famenglory Is everyone ready to go?
The lights are up and bright
The house is full tonight
Your lines i hope you know
Is everyone in their places?
Will the audience scorn or love?
My heart flutters like the wings of a dove
And in the end will there be tears orsmiles on thier faces?
Up the ladder:
Love
Down the ladder:
dollar collar
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Posted: January 1, 2003 5:03 PM PST; Last modified: January 1, 2003 5:03 PM PSTWeighted score: 4.6 Overall Rank: 12522 Comments:
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deleted user @ 68.83.126.60
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1-Jan-03/5:16 PM
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i like it, i can feel the actor's anticipation and excitement.
Bravo =)
"orsmiles on thier" before you attempt to get crafty nb you should, perhaps. spell check.
Will the play be enjoyed by the aristocratic, older than God, white couple seated on row 1...probably not, but that's the point.
Your turn...IN THE NAME OF GOD..I REBUKE YOU, CAST YOU PUT EVIL DEMON!
by the way..what play was it? ummmm this poem made me feel very alive and wholesome.
could use some serious work on delivery, I think. it's cute, but it doesn't flow, and that loses it for me. 4
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