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Sword of All (Lyric) by marvelis
The power within. The desire within. The time; a-coming. The dream; arriving. Hellfire in brimstone Could not distone, The desire amounting For the dream a-coming. Through the ages And through the races, Through the defeats And unbearable feats, The victories come; Defeats no longer hum, As once did. The words, once spoken, now are heed. "Fight with all might and victory will defeat All foes that meet." Wars, a-raging, The dream still standing As powerful as ever before. As high as the heavens grace. Now fear without core Stands no chance. Heart, dreams, love, commitment, desire, and soul Compose the sword of all. The smoke shall clear, And peace shall all hear As comes the wisdom To create the kingdom.

Up the ladder: First Site
Down the ladder: Breaking Away

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Arithmetic Mean: 2.6666667
Weighted score: 4.37247
Overall Rank: 13031
Posted: December 18, 2002 4:40 PM PST; Last modified: December 18, 2002 5:07 PM PST
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[7] Ranger @ 212.219.142.161 | 19-Dec-02/12:50 AM | Reply
Some of this is very good, some is less than...
The second to last stanza is good, as is "Fight with all might"
Maybe you could put a dragon in there, and some wizards too(!) Don't worry, I'm just off in a Tolkien world...
[5] Caducus @ 62.105.88.10 | 19-Dec-02/4:35 AM | Reply
this is well written, and i to favour power poetry and rhyme (saw your details) i think the sword needs to go back in the scabbard as it needs a little sharpening, what is your point? it seems a little all over the place. -05-
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