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Sword of All (Lyric) by marvelis

The power within. The desire within. The time; a-coming. The dream; arriving. Hellfire in brimstone Could not distone, The desire amounting For the dream a-coming. Through the ages And through the races, Through the defeats And unbearable feats, The victories come; Defeats no longer hum, As once did. The words, once spoken, now are heed. "Fight with all might and victory will defeat All foes that meet." Wars, a-raging, The dream still standing As powerful as ever before. As high as the heavens grace. Now fear without core Stands no chance. Heart, dreams, love, commitment, desire, and soul Compose the sword of all. The smoke shall clear, And peace shall all hear As comes the wisdom To create the kingdom.

Caducus 19-Dec-02/4:35 AM
this is well written, and i to favour power poetry and rhyme (saw your details) i think the sword needs to go back in the scabbard as it needs a little sharpening, what is your point? it seems a little all over the place. -05-




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