poemranker ::fire by bxjay170

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Free verse № 30652

fire

Member since 2002 · Posted 17 Dec 2002 · 6 comments

let me give ya a idea on what real thugs go through/our pain is worst then a fatal stab wound/the way sh@ts goin down i dont think am gonna be here soon/we hustling in the streets searching for the rich man's treasure/why is it that humans are the only animals that kill for pleasure/am about to take ya real deep/most cats claim it but they aint really street/in the subarbs my rhymes are banned/jay's just something noone can understand/cops aint a threat to me cauze i slip out there fingers faster than sand/am from the ghetto where chickens give head with no hands/f@ck cars and jewelry i need fame to put food on the table for my fam/nigg@s it was written in blood "the dom" i am/

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6 comments

[5] nentwined 17-Dec-02/1:36 PM Reply
interesting. any reason you used /'s as linebreaks? damned glad I put in the "wordwrap ~ 72 chars" code a few days ago. this seems like a reasonable rap, but I don't see anything here that makes it stand out from the crowd.
[3] god'swife 17-Dec-02/2:17 PM Reply
shouldn't it be 'slip out their hands...' by the way we are not the only animals who kil for pleasure. Eatings a pleasure, and fuckings a pleasure, and so is being #1.
[3] god'swife › god'swife 17-Dec-02/2:20 PM Reply
In fact it may be argued that we are the only animals who question the morality/immorality of killing.
[0] poetandknowit › god'swife 17-Dec-02/2:22 PM Reply
Pigs can also do that.
[0] poetandknowit 17-Dec-02/7:58 PM Reply
Why all the /////s and @s?
[10] slapmeonthepatio 6-Feb-04/7:40 PM Reply
awesome