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fire (Free verse) by bxjay170

let me give ya a idea on what real thugs go through/our pain is worst then a fatal stab wound/the way sh@ts goin down i dont think am gonna be here soon/we hustling in the streets searching for the rich man's treasure/why is it that humans are the only animals that kill for pleasure/am about to take ya real deep/most cats claim it but they aint really street/in the subarbs my rhymes are banned/jay's just something noone can understand/cops aint a threat to me cauze i slip out there fingers faster than sand/am from the ghetto where chickens give head with no hands/f@ck cars and jewelry i need fame to put food on the table for my fam/nigg@s it was written in blood "the dom" i am/

nentwined 17-Dec-02/1:36 PM
interesting. any reason you used /'s as linebreaks? damned glad I put in the "wordwrap ~ 72 chars" code a few days ago. this seems like a reasonable rap, but I don't see anything here that makes it stand out from the crowd.




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