beauty

by Adriaan

Member since 2002 · Posted 12 Jun 2002 · Edited 27 Feb 2006 · 6 comments

dancing fireflies: cast out of a speeding car, cigarette explodes

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[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 16-Jun-02/5:33 PM Reply

I suggest that you read some poetry written in the last ten years! This is silly, silly nonsense.

[8] Dovina 27-Feb-06/6:31 PM Reply

Don't you mean haiku? Good analogy.

[n/a] Adriaan › Dovina 28-Feb-06/3:26 AM Reply

Thanks for the comment. This poem refers to the foibles of humanity, and thus I have categorised it as a senryu. It is a bit of a borderline case though, and could well be called a haiku.

[8] Ranger 1-Mar-06/9:36 AM Reply

Fireflies-cigarette, fantastic analogy.
I really do like your haikus (senryus, whichever is appropriate.)

[8] LilMsLadyPoet 1-Mar-06/10:00 AM Reply

ah-ha! cool! Very good!

[10] Spirit52 20-Dec-08/1:46 PM Reply

Vivid images here....excellent!