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Free verse № 29054

She Puts The Fun In Funeral

by David

Member since 2002 · Posted 7 Dec 2002 · Edited 7 Dec 2002 · 9 comments

We stole into the community garden Ate other peoples produce She took me to an AA meeting Smiled and lit everybody's cigarettes We had no car to drive She sang 'Oops I Did It Again' while we waited for the bus We rode to the Salvation Army food center Took only oreos and fruit-loops

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[8] Bachus 7-Dec-02/5:07 PM Reply
"she wore dresses she could throw away in the morning" larry rivers.
[n/a] David › Bachus 9-Dec-02/12:54 PM Reply
"and now she's very tranquil and she calls the cows by their first name. The moon fascinates her." Henry Miller
[9] debased 7-Dec-02/5:48 PM Reply
if this chicks real she is so cool /9
[n/a] Bill Z Bub 7-Dec-02/11:15 PM Reply
I like it, but it feels unfinished.
[n/a] David › Bill Z Bub 9-Dec-02/12:56 PM Reply
Do you mean I should keep going or give it some kind of moral or something? I have hundreds of memories of her but I don't want to give them all up.
[n/a] Bill Z Bub › David 9-Dec-02/6:21 PM Reply
I'm not sure. Not a moral. Maybe slight closure? It needs an ending.
[n/a] Bill Z Bub › Bill Z Bub 9-Dec-02/6:22 PM Reply
On the other hand, everyone else seems to love it, so what do I know?
[10] Garrett S Sexton 8-Dec-02/3:42 AM Reply
Sounds like a nice day out.Asprin protects you.All i got is this ring.IT'S MINE!ALL MINE.YOU WAN'T IT,HAH CAN'T HAVE IT,MINE SEE HAH.THE POWER!GREED,HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAAHAHAH!STILL MINE!HAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAH.GOOD POEM THOUGHHAHAHAHHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHA LORD OF YOUR RING ME ISHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAGO AWAY IT'S MINE HAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAYOU CAN'T HAVE ITHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAAHAHHAHHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH
[n/a] David › Garrett S Sexton 10-Dec-02/8:52 AM Reply
You need aspirin, take two and call me in the morning. That will be $50.00 please. Oh wait, this is a first visit, make that $95.00.