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December once again (Free verse) by sunfloweronfire
As you sit within the warmth of your four walls Basking in the glow of the Christmas tree Adorned with gifts galore Listen to the raging wind As it smacks against the windowpanes And see if you can hear The rattling tin can of the beggar sitting Two streets down Stranded in the shadows With nothing to embrace But the fading thought of those four warm walls...

Up the ladder: Sent from Above
Down the ladder: this one is for Jon

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Arithmetic Mean: 2.75
Weighted score: 4.7317934
Overall Rank: 11747
Posted: December 5, 2002 10:23 AM PST; Last modified: December 5, 2002 10:23 AM PST
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[4] god'swife @ 209.179.212.194 | 5-Dec-02/10:54 AM | Reply
Your poems seem to have a the black thread of hypocrisy running through them. You point out the weakness in others, which for me personally, is a big turn off. Righteous indignation is also hypocritical. Di you ever turn the magnifying glass on yourself, it burns but usually reveals more relevent and touching details.
[n/a] sunfloweronfire @ 62.255.73.75 > god'swife | 5-Dec-02/12:19 PM | Reply
Sorry for annoying you with my mixed up, teenage, hormonally driven way of writing about things that piss me off. Avert your eyes to some other page.
[4] god'swife @ 209.179.136.248 > sunfloweronfire | 5-Dec-02/1:16 PM | Reply
What on earth are you talking about? Annoying, teenage, hormonal? When did I use these words to discribe you? I made a comment, constructive at that. It would behoove you to take my advice, but no matter. By the way cast all the vengeful 0's on my poems as you like, the votes mean nothing to me. They only reflect what is difficult to express with words. If your poems come up in random and I feel like commenting I will. At that point you have 3 choices;

Take some good advice
Censor my comment straight off
Reply with an assinine hurt little girl whine

It is all up to you. My comment was well intended, and in fact quite accurate.
[n/a] ==Doylum @ 62.188.131.130 > god'swife | 6-Dec-02/6:37 AM | Reply
i think dearest swife those are words she is using about herself. but i think one could be applied to you in your response to sunfloweronfire response. It would behoove you to take my advice - self-righteous as it gets.
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