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Learning Self (Free verse) by nentwined meaning begins with self for that is.
a seed in the void --
learning the
self leads to others, lines turn to webs;
learning others leads to self,
seed turns to flower;
websoil conducts being,
meaning is in the
entangled souls.
Up the ladder:
Voyage of the Browne
Down the ladder:
The Wonderful Creators
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Posted: March 16, 2002 1:19 AM PST; Last modified: March 16, 2002 1:19 AM PSTWeighted score: 6.5866666 Overall Rank: 618 Comments:
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19-Jun-01/1:52 AM
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I really like the last two lines. The rest feels -- hmm -- "Been there, done that".
you use the word self a lot. and the idea of learning. hmmm. mbonica@yahoo.com
great final line-pulls it all together
I like how the repetition of words mirrors the imagery of the poem-- and it's a neat summary of the social dynamic of the internet, as well. Nicely written!
link to delink...i think? compact is a stretch to say the least...7/10...i love your site..it's better than playing captain von trap in the sound of music (don't tell anyone).
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