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Free verse № 23474

Down Again

by Birdman42s

Member since 2002 · Posted 2 Nov 2002 · 6 comments

Down Again I've been pushed down so many times I feel this time will be the last as I lay here fading my thoughts are invaded by memories of my past I feel the pressures of shame and rejection building as I lay here on the floor I have no strength to get up I'm not worth it any more

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6 comments

[10] vulcan 3-Nov-02/12:28 AM Reply
great!impressive very!
[5] limonade 3-Nov-02/12:35 AM Reply
You are good with rhythm. If you work on finding a way to make your reader feel what you are feeling, rather than just telling them, your work will be greatly improved. Imagine your feelings as something, even something as simple as a monster under the bed, and describe your feelings in metaphor.
[10] deleted user 3-Nov-02/7:08 AM Reply
Amazing!
[7] t_t_redhot 3-Nov-02/5:14 PM Reply
It is great. I think it explains how everyone feels at one time or another.
[n/a] <~> 4-Nov-02/11:26 AM Reply
prescription drugs can solve this for you, birdman
[0] poetandknowit 19-Nov-02/7:18 PM Reply
I. I. I. Me. Me. Me. Really this is nothing more than a statement without any images. One screwed up sentence of "Oh Woe, Woe is Me." Not a poem worth anything.