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Down Again (Free verse) by Birdman42s

Down Again I've been pushed down so many times I feel this time will be the last as I lay here fading my thoughts are invaded by memories of my past I feel the pressures of shame and rejection building as I lay here on the floor I have no strength to get up I'm not worth it any more

limonade 3-Nov-02/12:35 AM
You are good with rhythm. If you work on finding a way to make your reader feel what you are feeling, rather than just telling them, your work will be greatly improved. Imagine your feelings as something, even something as simple as a monster under the bed, and describe your feelings in metaphor.




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