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Break (Free verse) by angel_uy Left alone the tears flow so true
Missing him so much
Yet nothing I can do.
The smile he put on my face
Has long since dissapeared.
Hatred here is not the case
Our friendship will prevail.
My love for him will always last
Even if this is the end
And our relationship stays the past.
Our memories will never fade,
The future may be unclear
But the the past I will not trade.
Forever in my eyes he'll be
The one true love that I need.
I know his happiness is key,
So I hope this means one day with me he'll be.
Up the ladder:
The day I told her
Down the ladder:
End of life
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Posted: October 25, 2002 4:05 PM PDT; Last modified: October 25, 2002 4:05 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.820706 Overall Rank: 10900 Comments:
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Tintagiles @ 198.164.250.181
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26-Oct-02/6:36 PM
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I do believe I have stepped onto holy ground. Who could have guessed there were so many angels in the world, and who all wrote poemes? Have these people no imagination, no capability to think of some other name? Or are they merely all so self-aggrandising that they take themselves for things above the human? Pah! And people call me pretentious.
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Tintagiles @ 198.164.250.181
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26-Oct-02/6:37 PM
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Oh, and about the poem: making a silly inersion like 'with me he'll be' does not make it poetry. Especially when the rhyme scheme works without the inversion.
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angel_uy @ 24.222.29.234
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27-Oct-02/11:21 AM
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I realize the rhyme scheme works without the inversion, but I liked it better with it, and since I am the writer, I thought I would write what I liked better.
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angel_uy @ 24.222.29.234
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27-Oct-02/11:18 AM
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My user name is just that, a name, I use it because me and my best friend started with the nick names evil angel and perfect devil many years ago. There is no other meaning then that behind it. One last thing, this site is about the poetry not the name, so get a life, you take things way to seriously.
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