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Break (Free verse) by angel_uy

Left alone the tears flow so true Missing him so much Yet nothing I can do. The smile he put on my face Has long since dissapeared. Hatred here is not the case Our friendship will prevail. My love for him will always last Even if this is the end And our relationship stays the past. Our memories will never fade, The future may be unclear But the the past I will not trade. Forever in my eyes he'll be The one true love that I need. I know his happiness is key, So I hope this means one day with me he'll be.

Tintagiles 26-Oct-02/6:37 PM
Oh, and about the poem: making a silly inersion like 'with me he'll be' does not make it poetry. Especially when the rhyme scheme works without the inversion.




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