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one man opponent (Haiku) by chinstrap an old man plays chess
by himself at a cafe
he is a winner!
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Posted: October 23, 2002 2:05 AM PDT; Last modified: October 23, 2002 2:05 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.2811766 Overall Rank: 3770 Comments:
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cleverdevice @ 212.219.142.161
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23-Oct-02/4:07 AM
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I don't think it needs an exclamation mark. It was going really well untill the last line, 'he is a winner!' just trivializes it I'm afraid.
bitter to the last drop. delicious indigestion. lose the !
why?>'
dont u people get it?! there has to be a winner between opponents and since he's the only opponent.. duh.. you people don't know what POETRY IS!!!! ;P ;D
by that argument, he is a loser also. unfortunately the dichotomy has been lost in the silly tone of the last line.
If they didn't contain completely different words, I'd say this was plagiarised from my epic piece "Enabled". -10-!!!
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