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one man opponent
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chinstrap
an old man plays chess by himself at a cafe he is a winner!
cleverdevice
23-Oct-02/4:07 AM
I don't think it needs an exclamation mark. It was going really well untill the last line, 'he is a winner!' just trivializes it I'm afraid.
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