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Free verse № 21198

Woke Up

Member since 2002 · Posted 18 Oct 2002 · 2 comments

sleeping soundly and undisturbed haven't dreamed like this before wish I never had little more sweet salvation to rest my bones beside the passion of fire and moans which fuels the desire in my furnace and opens my eyes to your breathing flesh. woke up to a dream that I will never wake up from my heart is busting at its seams for how graceful reality has become a dessert for my lips and a sunset for my eyes the sensation between my hips and sweat from off my thighs an eternity comes too soon when I affect your tide like the Moon. the center of the puzzle looked like the table it sat upon your pieces drifted gently in and exposed the absence for what it was so fit yourself in rest naked upon my chest challenging all others to bet to find a difference in our silohuettes.

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[8] <{Baba^Yaga}> 18-Oct-02/4:03 PM Reply
really takes off in the second stanza, and finishes nice. i give you a 69. oh. can't go that high..i see...than an 8. for you and your mate
[9] Bachus 7-Dec-02/5:41 PM Reply
still charming.