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#14 (Haiku) by mikejedw Garden path in dusk--
the well-tread shale has become
dark at its edges.
Up the ladder:
To Brittany
Down the ladder:
To Mother
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Posted: May 14, 2002 10:46 PM PDT; Last modified: May 14, 2002 10:46 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.5871983 Overall Rank: 2331 Comments:
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anonymous @ 206.132.30.234
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15-May-02/9:07 AM
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not as effective as your others...if there's a way to give an impression of the the worn pathway without stating that it's "well-tread"... would give it more power and meaning - but good start. - aduren
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