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#14 (Haiku) by mikejedw

Garden path in dusk-- the well-tread shale has become dark at its edges.

anonymous 15-May-02/9:07 AM
not as effective as your others...if there's a way to give an impression of the the worn pathway without stating that it's "well-tread"... would give it more power and meaning - but good start. - aduren




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