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Sanity's Defeat

Member since 2002 · Posted 8 Oct 2002 · 3 comments

A lonely man Standing wearily Defeat in his eyes Losing his lowly war Voices from within Echoing harsh words At first like a whisper Then slowly growing Louder and louder Until not one thought Can be heard over the roar Of Laughter so cold "Why would they have you? How could they ever care for such a pathetic being" Falling to his knees Realizing the truth inside that no person in this world could ever begin to love such a lowly creature hands covering his face as he weeps silent tears wishing for comfort someone who could help him take away the pain inside but he knows he is alone all that surrounds him is the lonely darkness as the night falls all that can be heard are cries of heartache wishing for an angel the angel of death to please release him of the pain and sorrow bring him home but no answer can be heard maybe one day he will find peace one day

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[10] Katie 8-Oct-02/10:00 AM Reply

Brandon, another great poem! I like the feel of this one, I like the point of the whole thing. This poem was really interesting to me. Keep up the good work brandon!! And good luck at work!!

[n/a] god'swife 8-Oct-02/7:07 PM Reply

Sweet child. You are alone because you choose it, or because you need chemicals to help you with your depression. Either way, it makes me sad to think of you languishing in solitude. Life is short to the extreme.

[n/a] loneshadow29 › god'swife 9-Oct-02/8:57 AM Reply

Please my dear god'swife, be not concerned with the life of this shadow... no longer does he dwell in darkness, but bask in the warmth of the light... the darkness of night consumes him no longer, depression wilting away like the rose in fall... you're a very caring person... but fear not, I am not alone on this long road... nor ever again shall I be... caring souls like you shall always be my guides, to steer me from the darkness, forever roaming in the light. :o) hehe, sorry about that... felt a little poetic :o)