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Words of Wisdom... (Free verse) by loneshadow29
There is a little phrase To help in daily life Through all trials and tribulations It can be your salvation, Whenever you feel You're being pressured Or when you're unsure Don't do it... if you feel like the consequences outweigh all of the good when deeds you may accomplish may find you in deep shit Don't do it... if tobacco, alcohol, drugs or such is brought to your attention if you don't like it Don't try it... Say no thank you If you don't to be around it If the thought or smell is grotesque Don't be ther... If the music or artist is not to your liking It's not so hard Turn on something that you like Don't listen to it... If their words seem offensive Why buy the music only to burn it Make a more sensible statement Don't buy it... When violence runs ramped When the nation's youth runs wild Look at how you've parented Don't point the finger... The world has problems, it's true Never try to make it worse By screaming to the top of your lungs That you don't like it or want it Why conform to the moral standard Because you pitch a fuss If you don't like it Don't do it

Up the ladder: crispy
Down the ladder: Purgatory of Consciousness

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.5
Weighted score: 4.25
Overall Rank: 13181
Posted: October 7, 2002 11:57 AM PDT; Last modified: October 7, 2002 11:57 AM PDT
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[5] jsab78 @ 205.188.209.107 | 7-Oct-02/12:30 PM | Reply
Interesting flow, definitely got the message. rock on man..I hear you
[9] Katie @ 64.158.49.93 | 7-Oct-02/1:00 PM | Reply
Hey shadow! Long time no see!! Well I've been waiting for your next poem then...there it is. hehe. Well hm...you should know me by now...I don't like when people go on about nothing, just mindless chitter chatter...it bugs the heck out of me, and it's just a waste of space. But this poem isn't like that!!! =) I love it, great poem, and I like your point of view! 9/10 =)
[3] deleted user @ 209.206.151.194 | 1-Nov-02/7:12 PM | Reply
This comes off as being more of a sermon than a poem. I like very much what you have to say, but would recommend trying to take more of a 'show, don't tell approach'. Humbly suggest line-break to give your readers a pause.
Good thoughts you have here.
[n/a] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 22-Jan-03/2:53 PM | Reply
You need a nice tight pair of hemp underwear.
[n/a] loneshadow29 @ 67.30.229.118 > horus8 | 23-Jan-03/11:47 AM | Reply
as much as I tried, I ended up smoking them before I even had a chance to put them on. :o)
[0] razorgrin @ 192.197.142.98 | 23-Jan-03/10:44 AM | Reply
There's always fiberglass insulation boxer biriefs or a nice razorwire g-string if the hemp undies seem too "hippie" for ya. lick the zero, baby. ohhh...yeah.. that's good.
[n/a] loneshadow29 @ 67.30.229.118 > razorgrin | 23-Jan-03/11:48 AM | Reply
hmmm... I don't know about you but it seems to me that you may suffer from a paim fixation. I just want to be honest with you... maybe you should consider switching to decaf.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.8.102 | 23-Jan-03/11:22 AM | Reply
If only someone had told me that before I decided to read this poeme. Or before I ingested that rather unpleasant sclerotic diaper toolkit.
[0] razorgrin @ 192.197.142.16 | 23-Jan-03/1:33 PM | Reply
I don't drink coffee.'Tis bad for you. I do indeed suffer from a pain fixation. No, I kid, i enjoy every second of it. Hugs 'n' kisses! Great poeme! You should come over to my basement and give a private reading... you aren't allergic to napalm, are you?
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