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Nothin lasts (Free verse) by Mutant_X
there was that delicate layer of tears surrounding my eyes that i couldn't see the crowd and with my hands,i covered my ears for i didn't want to hear it all seemed so un real and i didn't dare to move to my surprise they were clappin hands they were feelin so happy like they didn't know what i feel that i was on the edge of my fears and thoughts and pain and it seemed very easy to get insane it was only him,his vision among all the people i didn't know he was peace and comfort among all the tears and fears his vision was truth among all the lies as a ray of light that shines when the dawn seems yet very far only he knew what i felt he knew it was the greatest pain and i saw the sadness in his eyes i saw a faint of light that slowly fades away i felt his arms around me despite the metres between us it was way far sensable than reality space was nothin to us, it's almost too real to verbalize time stopped space freezed it was only me and him in the universe the last two creatures on Earth that seems to be an end,but it's a start and in the noise,i heard silence, only his words were knockin my ears he said just close ur eyes soon the sun would rise it's gonna be over, no pain lasts forever. he was right,it doesn't last forever maybe we can't stay together but it doens't matter, coz at a point everything seems to fade away even life itself still only that memory of him there's nothing more to say what we have is way stronger than society it would last despite the bitter reality and i know i would always hold a thought of him through all the times and places i know i'm safe,and i know it'll be ok as i always remember i aint alone in this huge place i know i have a trace as long as i love him. goodbye,was all he said i'll meet you in your dreams.

Up the ladder: Me and She.
Down the ladder: The TRust That Was Unreal

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.75
Weighted score: 4.663823
Overall Rank: 12256
Posted: September 28, 2002 5:14 AM PDT; Last modified: October 5, 2002 5:26 AM PDT
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[8] -=SeTTle=- @ 140.186.49.69 | 27-Oct-02/6:48 PM | Reply
Sincerity alone is almost never enough for a poem to go on - this is an exception. Excellent work, try expanding the range of subject matters which you right about - don't just write about what you most strongly feel.
[6] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 16-Jan-03/9:20 PM | Reply
<yes ladies and gentlemen it's time for that all around infectious bastard once again horus8 [crowd pelts him with joints and g-strings he motions his hands for a hushing effect] good evening poets and frauds it's time for 'random encounters' the only show on poem ranker that allows us to dig into the amateur files, to remember the poets we've lost, and to find the poets we'll need to remember..that undiscovered poet could be you> here we see mutant x taking a wild stab at teenage love and the inevitable bitter seperation of highschool sweethearts, and 'wrist slashing' let's just be friends. 6.
[9] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 24.209.19.37 | 11-Apr-03/10:22 PM | Reply
I think this sounds alot like some of your other work but still very touching
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