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#3 (Haiku) by mikejedw This damp soil, chocolate
frosting on the floating world--
ants in the garden.
Up the ladder:
He Hunts For Meaning
Down the ladder:
Jeff
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Posted: May 13, 2002 7:10 AM PDT; Last modified: May 13, 2002 7:10 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.5744033 Overall Rank: 2409 Comments:
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lilli @ 134.226.1.158
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23-May-02/2:31 AM
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Hey -- this isn't half bad! I think "floating world" is a cliche, though, as well as being scentifically inaccurate (poetry doesn't give you a licence you know..)
who/gives/a shit about ants/profundity through obscurity/always a sign of/unclear thought/according to neitzsche and common/sen/se.
Obscurity? The idea of the "floating world" is a foundation of Buddhist mythology. Plus, I'm riffing on one of the world's most famous haiku, by Issa: "In this world/we walk on the roof of hell/gazing at flowers." Oh, and Nietzsche was beloved by the Nazis, so pick your heroes wisely. Hey, it ain't a great haiku, so don't take it too serious, and I won't do the same.
haiku!
haiku!
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