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Haiku № 1781

#3

by mikejedw

Member since 2002 · Posted 13 May 2002 · 5 comments

This damp soil, chocolate frosting on the floating world-- ants in the garden.

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[7] lilli 23-May-02/2:31 AM Reply
Hey -- this isn't half bad! I think "floating world" is a cliche, though, as well as being scentifically inaccurate (poetry doesn't give you a licence you know..)
[3] -=SeTTle=- 30-Jul-02/8:23 PM Reply
who/gives/a shit about ants/profundity through obscurity/always a sign of/unclear thought/according to neitzsche and common/sen/se.
[n/a] mikejedw 30-Jul-02/10:20 PM Reply
Obscurity? The idea of the "floating world" is a foundation of Buddhist mythology. Plus, I'm riffing on one of the world's most famous haiku, by Issa: "In this world/we walk on the roof of hell/gazing at flowers." Oh, and Nietzsche was beloved by the Nazis, so pick your heroes wisely. Hey, it ain't a great haiku, so don't take it too serious, and I won't do the same.
[10] Robert K Foster 14-Aug-02/9:51 AM Reply
haiku!
[10] Robert K Foster 14-Aug-02/9:52 AM Reply
haiku!