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Disbeliever (Free verse) by ThoughtfulSoul I choose not to believe in that which I cannot see
That in which cannot be proven or touched
Many say faith is all I need and I reply back
Has faith ever needed you
God has not talked to me on the phone
Nor has he visited me in a dream
I wish the bible would be classified as a fiction novel
Do know that everything I have just said I do not believe
but do know any faith inside of me has died a long time ago
Up the ladder:
missing u
Down the ladder:
Premarital Sex (Zombie Fantasy)
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Posted: September 26, 2002 6:22 AM PDT; Last modified: September 26, 2002 6:22 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.764676 Overall Rank: 11411 Comments:
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Nicholas Jones @ 137.44.1.200
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26-Sep-02/6:45 AM
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I like the idea of wanting to disbelieve but being unable to. Not sure about the 'do know' construction, though. Otherwise, very nice. God has not talked to me in the phone, but nor has the Pope, and I think he's real. I suggest you go to church on Sunday and see if anything happens in your soul.
I think I would lose the last couplet and the word 'fiction' and then this would stand as a perfect statement.
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