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yellow afterthoughts (Free verse) by royalflesh
you can persecute us all, but it'll do little good on the back of matchbox. it'll do very little in the glory bar... where god drinks with the reindeer and fairytales... i know because he told me last night. they say, that these people walk into the world from out of town... bums, angels, expired monsters with lost teeth: old blue eyes and the evilboys. they call them bad days because they don't know the rulesof america or earth. i know a man that says if he knew hitler in high school he would kill him with a pocketknife. what a hero? my american hero... i think they named an omelet after him at a diner. bob dylan or pilate (can't remember come to think of it) said he would kill jesus in a nursery before his vermilion magic could spill in america. they're sort of right though, magic is mean. its holocause mean. i used to sit in the mud with hitler and jesus. we were neighbors in winter you see. jesus came from a broken home, goddamn what a prankster he was. he told hitler that all the fashion models were catwalking in new york with high steps and funny waves. hitler was very pretty then and spent a million years trying to imitate those pictures. i guess he should have went to new york instead of auschewitz. hitler never was a jew. he always believed in jeses. that was the joke. but we were pretty good kids back then, before books. i had no idea hitler would become such an arnsonist. and who would have thought jesus was a junkie, all those needles in his veins pretending to be nails. heroin is so convincing, at times. hindsight is 20/20 though. good thing we snuffed em out when we did i guess. but i had no idea they were coming for me today. this is where the yellow connections begin so pay close attention like a traffic light...

Down the ladder: balthazar

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.1
Weighted score: 5.55
Overall Rank: 2472
Posted: September 21, 2002 10:45 PM PDT; Last modified: September 22, 2002 11:28 PM PDT
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[10] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 22-Sep-02/10:34 AM | Reply
take out the last sentence and this fucker is a nucleur hotcake fuck you get the HORUS8 JESUS AND HITLER WERE FRIENDS AWARD FOR POETRY on this fine 22 of september..enjoy..seriously consider dropping that last sentence though less is more. 10.
[n/a] royalflesh @ 64.170.53.6 > horus8 | 22-Sep-02/11:32 PM | Reply
HORUS8 - thanks for the suggestion...I too, agree. In the upmost respect, sir, you sit high upon my shelf of beauty, interest, and respect. Thank you. Please re-vote, if you please...the moon walks across the sky, eyeing the mysterious subject the entails humans..and others like you. (in a good way)
[9] Christof @ 195.172.133.226 | 23-Sep-02/3:45 AM | Reply
The more I read this the better it becomes. It takes a while for the situation to become clear to muddle-headed dimwit like myself, but it soon breaks out pretty powerfully. Yep.
[10] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 23-Sep-02/10:44 AM | Reply
jesu loves you..now that's a potent pistil seeking stamen..thankyou..for your reply..i also carry a strong clear respect for your scribbles...timeless and poignantly wide wide screen. you could be royal indeed..i your not a dark angel clone that is fucking stringing my mind.(which by the way i never puy past that skull cleaner) anyway...good morning. 10/10.
[n/a] royalflesh @ 67.115.85.132 > horus8 | 23-Sep-02/9:51 PM | Reply
funny how at first everyone thought i was you...now its gotta be D.A. ? Its strange how in this cyber-world it is easy to define someone as another...but in the face, the face becomes a person's main identity. Where's my champagne...and cocaine.
[7] <~> @ 24.44.185.41 > royalflesh | 23-Sep-02/9:55 PM | Reply
you may have some of mine, sirrah.
[n/a] royalflesh @ 64.170.52.254 > <~> | 24-Sep-02/11:28 PM | Reply
...thank's. i'll bring you the most beautiful colors you've ever seen...close your eyes. wait. 'till next time.
[7] Frass @ 138.88.156.211 | 23-Sep-02/11:06 AM | Reply
More really good poetry, Rylflsh. As an editor (among other things), I recommend resubmitting after a thorough edit/spellcheck; writing this good deserves it.
[7] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 | 23-Sep-02/12:27 PM | Reply
i had a bag full of their broken teeth. i made a magic necklace from them. when the moon is blue, is naked time and dancing is sweetest, and mud is the only covering permittes us. and mariglds. lovely, lovely marigolds.
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