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You're the Only One (Free verse) by Chels85 You're the only one that can make me smile,
But yet the only one that can make me cry
You overwhelmed me with your love
Yet we still had to say good-bye.
I ask myself why does this have to be
Because the reason were apart isn't because of you or me.
The problem is, it's not me feeling this way
It's my parents history,
Their driving us away
I ask the Lord above,
Why do you have to be the one I love
But then I realized,
You're the only man with those eyes
And it shouldn't matter what color of skin,
And that we will be together in the end!
Up the ladder:
Forbidden Love
Down the ladder:
Worst Haiku Ever
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 3.6923077
Posted: September 18, 2002 6:38 PM PDT; Last modified: September 18, 2002 6:38 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.044 Overall Rank: 13353 Comments:
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god'swife @ 209.179.134.108
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18-Sep-02/10:51 PM
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The sentiment of the last 3 couplets is so beautiful, but this needs reconstructive surgery. The whole "you're the only one" line needs to be dropped. It's been used to death. Most of this is pretty bad. It's a vocal desert.
oh kay. life's a bitch, hey?
Good work
gldsdl Able aooe
for fucks sake. i just heard the "it's a small world afterall" theme song to this, but god knows if i vote with bias they'll mock me. call me racist, and if i vote with awe and glossy eyes they'll say i'm a dolt. if you let your parents stand in the way of a nice rock hard black cock.than it wasn't love and you're a fool...do you know who "they" are? my shoe laces and zippers. 5..
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