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Soulless Circle (Haiku) by Tyler J. Mancini The race is over.
Why did we even bother?
I want some pizza.
Up the ladder:
my navaho conclusion
Down the ladder:
Spare Change
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 6.25
Posted: July 28, 2008 12:24 PM PDT; Last modified: July 28, 2008 12:24 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.1490035 Overall Rank: 5250 Comments:
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T. Jonathron Remp @ 74.192.174.220
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28-Jul-08/7:54 PM
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This is not a haiku, this is something my neighbor's elderly aunt vomited up after eating spoiled green tomatoes
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dvincent @ 71.109.127.126
> T. Jonathron Remp
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28-Jul-08/8:15 PM
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Actually this is a Haiku, and not a bad one at that. It captures a single moment/sentiment nicely. Good job Tyler.
Actually, no. It's not quite a haiku YET...
575. What we have here is 565. Add another syllable to the middle of this, and my six would become a seven.
It does have 7 syllables in the middle line.
-squints again- Ah fuck. I hate these moments... Oh well, atleast we know the drugs are good and they are definetly working.
So anyway TJTwin, heres your seven. Oh, and your shutup list had the opposite effect... and it wasn't even funny.
Your counting skills are akin to that of a brain dead 4th grader... Nice job!
Wow, your skill at being opportunistic only reinforces the fact that you're horridly unoriginal and possess the character qualities of a tantalized vulture. But, on the brighter side, you got a minor vote score adjustment that says you barely made par. Toodles dipshit!
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