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Sim Saladin (Free verse) by bonjoo
Enslaved in sand, squatting in nests, oppressive lands, females corressed. Headtowels face east, or bowels maimed, praying for peace, holding a knife, blood-stained. Strap on those sticks, and don that rag gown, all non-believers pricks, their skin not even half brown. "Allahu Akbar!" "Allahu Akbar!" Now going to Virgins, but not the megastore.


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Arithmetic Mean: 8.5
Weighted score: 5.1659904
Overall Rank: 5082
Posted: May 12, 2008 1:12 AM PDT; Last modified: May 12, 2008 1:12 AM PDT
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[7] SupremeDreamer @ 69.236.69.24 | 30-May-08/12:22 PM | Reply
caressed.

Plus, it'd be a lot better if you said "towelheads".

Headtowels sound very gay.
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