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too much too soon (Free verse) by JMakStak
I’m sick. I’m getting sicker. The mirror has paint on it. The mirror has me in it. I have paint on my face. I’m growing old. My hair is falling out. My eyes are white. My skin is mottled. My eyes are wide open. My ears are stuck shut. I hear a song. My name is in it. I’m in the song. I wrote the song. I’m lost to youth. My teeth are falling out. My skin is clear. I’m sick. I’m getting sicker. You’re a whisper. I can hear you. I always whisper. I hear my name whispered. I whispered my name. My eyes are closed tight. My ears are open wide. The song ends. My name is muttered. It’s a different song. I didn’t sing the song. That wasn’t my song.


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Arithmetic Mean: 8.5
Weighted score: 5.1659904
Overall Rank: 5081
Posted: July 29, 2008 1:27 AM PDT; Last modified: July 29, 2008 1:28 AM PDT
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Comments:
[7] Don-Quixote @ 76.254.27.93 | 29-Jul-08/5:11 PM | Reply
Tell me about it.
[10] T. Jonathron Remp @ 76.210.104.80 | 29-Jul-08/11:35 PM | Reply
This is good, this is REAL good. Haha, just kidding. This is bad. Please stop.
[10] T. Jonathron Remp @ 76.210.104.80 > T. Jonathron Remp | 29-Jul-08/11:36 PM | Reply
HAHA just kidding. Man, you got talent.
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